Week 5 Story- The Birth of Athra
In the deepest of blues’, all the way down at the ocean
floor, lived a flourishing kingdom. There was peace in this kingdom. There was
life, color, and happiness. Every one did their job to ensure that the peace of
their kingdom stayed in order. What was usually a quiet town, was somewhat
flipped upside down today. The streets were full with the townspeople, half of
them cleaning, and the other half decorating. The palace in the kingdom was
expecting an arrival. This was no regular visitor, however. The arrival was
that of something that had been growing in the town for nine months.
Specifically, growing in the belly of Queen Amaya, wife of King Anado. When
Queen Amaya learned that she was pregnant, she was overjoyed with the news of
her first child. However, when the goddesses of the sea descended down to
deliver a message just for the unborn child, Amaya knew that the life inside of
her was greater than she was. The message that was delivered spoke of the
prophecy that would be the child. This child would bring life to the deep
oceans. This child, with the touch of their finger, could restore an ocean
floor. When the king learned of this message, he sought out to prepare his
kingdom for the greatest gift they had ever received. The plans were not shared
with Queen Amaya, as the King wanted it to be kept secret until the day came
for the child to be born. The day, however, had finally come. Amaya reported to
her husband that it was time, and that she wanted to be taken to the spot where
the child was going to be born. King Anando immediately ordered servants to
come dress and prepare the Queen for her departure. Amaya was taken, and
dressed in the finest of clothing, made from materials that naturally grew in
their kingdom. Her long, flowing dress was woven with the softest of sea grass,
and had the bountiful colors of the reefs woven in. She was given a new crown
to wear, crafted from the finest coral they had. As she descended through the
town to her birthing spot, she saw that every home had been cleaned and
repainted, each a different color from the ocean floor. She was amazed as she
arrived to her spot, hidden deep within the seabed, with all of the privacy she
needed. This was King Anando’s plan, to welcome the child into the purest form
of his or her new home. He wanted the child to enter into all of the beauty
that was their home. At last, the arrival of their long expected visitor came,
and Princess Athra was welcomed into their world. The town rejoiced, songs were
sung, and dances were danced, as they knew that the one they had been waiting
for a long time, the one that would bring all life and beauty to their town,
had finally arrived.
Authors Note:
I decided to write this story after I read, “The birth of
Siddhartha” in the Life of Buddha unit. In the original, it describes the birth
of Siddhartha, beginning with Queen Maya. It describes how she was put in the
finest jewels the town had, in preparation for the birth. The whole town was
decorated with all of the gold and silvers, to ensure that the birth of
Siddhartha, who was deemed as a prophecy before birth, would be born into the
most elaborate setting. I was blown away with the amount of imagery and detail the
author wrote the story in. I could picture everything he said in every line,
which I thought was so interesting. This was my first swing at a writing style
like that, so we will see where it goes.
Bibliography: Andre Ferdinand
Herold, The Life of Buddha (1922),The Life of Buddha
Hello Adriana!
ReplyDeleteI loved your story! It's so sweet and pure and magical! You do an excellent job with your imagery and setting details! I could see everything you described and I felt like I was there! I thought your way of introducing the fact that the queen was pregnant was innovative and outside the box! I really enjoyed that! The only thing I would suggest for you would be to break up different ideas into paragraphs so your story reads and flows a little easier!
I think you did a fantastic job with this writing style, setting and description is definitely one of your strong points!
I think you did a very good job with this story! You said that you were aiming for a higher level of imagery, and I believe you did achieve that. I like how you chose your characters’ names. Very clever. Honestly this just made me happy. The entire city was filled with joy for the queen and her new child. There were no bad intentions here. The king even went out of his way to make his wife’s day special. I feel that a lot of kings I read of in these stories give away their daughters to random men like they’re nothing. This one seems like he’ll treasure her.
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